One night I was on the streets with my friends for what was initially thought to be a fun night of drinking, yet it turned out to be a near disaster. One of my friends had too much to drink and collapsed. I and my friends all panicked not knowing what to do. He was admitted to hospital and that night he almost died. One careless night with my friends nearly turned into the worst night of my life.
The effect of this opening paragraph is that is gives it an emotional feel, someone’s actual experience and opens the eyes of the reader to the small anecdote which could easily happen to them if they are not careful. It is short which increases the read-speed and adds more energy. The shock/ horror introduction captures the reader’s attention; it draws them in and makes them want to continue reading.
You should be asking yourself these questions: are you an underage drinker? Are getting drunk to often? Do you not think about what you’re doing to yourself? Can you answer me these questions: are you concerned about the amount of alcohol consumption you have and where you future lies if you continue? Are you concerned about your personal well-being, your short-term health and long-term health, if you’re not then why not? You need to think to yourselves; could this affect my family? But most of all you need to ask yourselves; why do I drink?
The effect of this opening paragraph is that it hooks the reader; they find that they want to read on because the questions are making them want the answers. It has a medium speed; I think this makes the reader become lost in the paragraph and find themselves just continuing to read which means that the paragraph has done its job because it is meant to make the reader read on.
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